Thursday, October 14, 2010

2 Poems for Poets United Prompt

Blue I
I dived into dark water
Swam down as far as I could go
Touched the muddy sea ground
Then rose
My airless lungs, my feet beating furious
I made it to the surface, my breath fulfilled
The sun was warm
It was good to see the sky deep and blue

Blue II
I lay in waiting
Cold Comfort eases no pain
I sleep sometimes in an old Square Corner
My stomach any empty growl
Starve me
Take all that is mine
This life sustained
An imagination as All
Like a rising heaven,
clouds turn from a Blue poet's sky

SC: These are a couple of Blue poems from the Square Corner archive. I'd forgotten I wrote them, so it was if I was reading them for the first time. A couple of minor edits, and they are new again


Systematic Weasel said...

Both are wonderful responses to the prompt! =)


Sherry Blue Sky said...

"Like a rising heaven, Clouds turn from a Blue poet's sky." How beautiful. I love these - great Blue poems!

Old Ollie said...

Cool - these flow S.Q.

Anonymous said...

Lovely Blue poems - the first one especially pulled me into the dive... and out again

dasuntoucha said...

Love the color what you did with these two poems. (^_^)

Susannah said...

Really enjoyed these, the first one especially caught me with its imagery and I dived too. :-)

Kerry O'Connor said...

I like the switch from the visual blue to the melancholy blue. Both are beautiful poems.

Bing (PinkLady) said...

these are really lovely "blue" poems! :)

umapoems said...

Both Blues are wonderful...loved it

Philip Thrift said...

Blue me away!

Olivia said...

Love the flow of your words.. both very inspirational.. :D

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Carrie Burtt said...

You cannot go wrong with the color represents so many things wonderful and sad....lovely poems for the prompt! :-)

ninotaziz said...

Blue, the most beautiful colour, is also the most expressive.

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

I loved both poems with reference to the colour blue.
Excellent words...and images

Best wishes, Eileen

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I so LOVE these two, even more the second time around - especially the last lines: "Like a rising heaven, clouds turn from a Blue poet's sky." Absolutely beautiful. I also love "any empty growl" a LOT.........great writing!